The Apartment author commentary concludes! SPOILER WARNING ahead. Big time for this one!
Figuring out the threat…
When it came time to figure out who these ghosts were hassling people in Portents, the first two or three drafts never named them.
Yes – them.
Three were present in the first drafts. I made their appearances vague, their motivations even more nebulous. I had no idea how they connected to the story or how to raise the stakes. At one point I was researching things like Blackbeard and Napoleon in an effort to connect with some legendary aspect.
They didn’t fit. None of it fit with the narrative.
Enter the Kindly Killer
It was during the self-editing phase when I stumbled on this notion of the Kindly Killer. He is the first connection between Loren and Soriya, a vital part of their so-called origin story and when I remembered him he fit so perfectly I couldn’t stop writing until the story was completed.
Having that personal connection with Soriya at the climax of the tale raised the stakes. She knows how dangerous Walter can be and can’t risk his return to the mortal plane. Making it personal, looking for that deeper meaning in terms of the overall narrative of Greystone, builds a better story in my mind.
I hope you agree.
Why care so much about the Kindly Killer?
Walter Schriff has been around since Signs of Portents. Always a background mention, never anything more. I did that purposely. (I try to do everything purposely…)
Some people believe his inclusion in the first novel is a distraction. I look at it differently.
His presence is a seed for something to come.
The Kindly Killer serves as a point of origin for Loren and Soriya’s relationship. His suddenly viciousness in slaughtering people, his arrest and the subsequent events that locked Loren and Soriya into this incredible journey lies at the heart of the story that will serve as Book Six of the series.
Say what?
Yeah. I’m a couple years away from putting it together. Having A Circle of Shadows back on my desk has sparked a few notions about what’s to come for the back half of the series.
But Walter Schriff plays a huge role in Book Six.
Get ready.
Red eyes…
Did you notice another old friend within the Bypass at the end of our story? Talking about raising stakes, having Soriya peer into the Bypass at the climax of the story served two purposes.
The first was to seed an event to come in A Circle of Shadows. (Shhh, it’s a secret…)
The second was to bring back old red eyes, Nathaniel Evans, for a cool cameo. I missed our old villain from Signs of Portents and once I realized Schriff played a role in the story I thought it would be cool to bring back more past threats as a nod for where we’ve been in the series.
And where we’re heading…
Did you enjoy the story? Did you like the nods to the past? Shoot me an email at lou@loupaduano.com to let me know.
Thanks for reading.